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Im so excited my book is now writen and Ive already got a cover design. More big news, just managed to get a hold of my editor yesterday, and as excited as he is about the new book, he made it very clear to me that I have a lot of work to do. National Novel Writing Month is only two months away and If I hope to start on my next novle in time to participate I am going to have to really nuckle down. Still not decided on which book I want to work on for the compitition but Im leaning more towards my sci-fi story. One way or another my priority right now is to finish The Dragon and The Onion Girl.
The Changes to expect In The Dragon and The Onion Girl:
Amung the most dramatic changes comming is to chapter ones structure and pacing. That should take me a bit as is. Next is my anatagonist, he is getting changed. I have also gotten a lot of sincere feedback from people telling me that most of the story Greta tells in chapter 2 comes off as a little preachy, so another big focus is cutting it down and making it seam a little less out of left feild. Probobly one of the hardest things im likly going to have to do however is a cut chapter 6 and merge it with chapter 7. Still talking this over with my editor but Im willing to make sacrifices for the story. One of the less hard things we are going to do is flush out and take care of all the lose ends I didnt resolve by the end of the last chapter. We found at least 9 big ones.
The Changes to expect In The Dragon and The Onion Girl:
Amung the most dramatic changes comming is to chapter ones structure and pacing. That should take me a bit as is. Next is my anatagonist, he is getting changed. I have also gotten a lot of sincere feedback from people telling me that most of the story Greta tells in chapter 2 comes off as a little preachy, so another big focus is cutting it down and making it seam a little less out of left feild. Probobly one of the hardest things im likly going to have to do however is a cut chapter 6 and merge it with chapter 7. Still talking this over with my editor but Im willing to make sacrifices for the story. One of the less hard things we are going to do is flush out and take care of all the lose ends I didnt resolve by the end of the last chapter. We found at least 9 big ones.
Its Done. Finally.
I have finally finished the rewrite of book one. Almost ten years in the making, the book is now in a state which I feel much more satisfied with. Naturally I sped through this rewrite rather quickly and as a result there are a lot of grammar and spelling errors. Naturally it will take a while for me to go through and clean everything up but I would be extreamly grateful for any help offered. For those who would like to comment directly, the official document is linked here. I am also very interested in hearing about any other problems my readers may have noticed. Namely pacing issues, parts of the story that dragged on, or skipped over material you wish I had gone into more detail on, plot holes, or parts you really just did not like. If a particular chapter or scene board you please let me know. I will take no offense and, in fact will thank you. What Next: As stated I will be slowly cleaning up book one. I will now also begin uploading chapters of book two. Hope you are all as
Updates, Feedback + Dates -The Black Candy Circus
I am officially finished with the first draft of the rewrite for Book one. I have to say it has been a fun wild ride revisiting The Black Candy Circus, again after all this time. Still a little ways left to go but I can't thank you all enough for the encouragement and help I have received along the way. As you can see, I have the rest all pretty much planned out with release dates for each chapter and everything. I have also summarized all of the main changes that were made to each chapter and included links to those chapters. I still have a lot of work left to do, need to go back and clean up all the changes I just made. Will also need to hire an editor to go through and help me out with wording and grammar. Once I that's all done I will republish and get back to writing Book Two. Hope to see you all there. The Witch Hunter Chronicles: Book 1: The Witch of the Black Candy Circus < Book 2: The Witch's Black Book Book 3: The Witch Hunters and the Sword of Eden Changes I Made So
Updating the Update
So as of tomorrow I will be updating chapters 1-14. As I have been writing, I have been getting wonderful feedback from you the community and I have been taking notes. Recently I went through and applied all those notes to the master google doc and now I just need to copy all those changes here in DA. That will happen tomorrow. Just a heads up but there have been a few minor plot changes and adjustments here and there as well as a few extra details added along the way. I had a particularly fun time with chapter 4. Also, yes. As of today I have finished editing chapter 14. If you want to read that now you can click the link to my google doc here. Still need to make a title card for it but that is already comming together. Chapter 15 will also likely be finished tomorrow also, so expect that to come out a little later this week. Anyway, thanks for all the feedback and help I have been getting along the way. A special shout out to Bruno-Bluthgeld. Your partnership has been a literal
Updates and Feedback - The Black Candy Circus
Hello Everyone. Its been a while but I am back and for my next project I am diligently rewriting and editing my first novel, The Black Candy Circus. As I continue I would much appreciate to get some feedback on some of the changes I have been making. For those of you who aren't familiar with this book, the story is a sort of modern day Hansel and Gretel. Two siblings get a job at a circus that is run by a sadistic witch with a habit of turning her employees into animals for her show. They both notice the danger too late however and spend the rest of the story trying to escape. Changes I Made So Far, and Plan To Make Here is the link to the origonal complete 2015 draft: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1XwyX-DHKWpGHyvq140-CB-9nZFR1rG_gh3niS9KUVSA/edit?usp=sharing Chapter 1: Deleted a tone of exposition. Whole paragraphs. A mistake I made as a budding writer was that I crammed all my character traits, backstory and descriptions right in the beginning. Even worse I didn't even
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Hey, I've been too far behind on book reading lately (sorry about that, btw), so let me know when it hits the shelves. I've been meaning to stop by Barnes & Nobles for months now.